Consider some of these questions:
What’s happening in the picture? How can you tell?
2. Is anything missing from the picture?
3. Does anything look wrong or out of place?
4. What happened five minutes before this scene? Five minutes after?
5. If you could change part of the picture, what would it be and why?
6. Where does the scene take place? What are the details that support your idea?
7. What is the season? Weather? How do you know?
8. What part do you not understand? Take a guess as to what it is. What else could it be?
9. How do the colors make you feel?
10. What is happening just outside, or ‘offstage’, of the image?
Today’s meeting will be about who we are. I thought we’d do this icebreaker using Dr. McCoy’s catch phrase from the original Star Trek. I have prepared name tags for this purpose.
Now try writing about who you are using Docs Demo. Here’s an example of something I did just now. Have a play with this.
The style I tried to use was the onomatopoeia. I feel like I needed a few more onomatopoeias.
Raucous in the dining hall. Zing! A button flies off a blazer too tight but still done up. The possibly year 10 student wearing the blazer is chomping away at a possibly ham and cheese sandwich. Sounds of shoes clapping away as students blabber and enjoy their own sandwiches. Crash! Somebody smashes into the aforementioned student knocking his lunch to the floor. The student gasps and turns to shout but the culprit already zipped away. Squelch, splat, squish, the sandwich is already obliterated under the thundering feet of students rushing to class. “Pfft,” the student swears under his breath. Sighing, he goes over to a friend hoping to get some sympathy.
Two hours later he is daydreaming about defending himself against the events that just happened. The teachers monotone voice calls out his name twice. The second time he groans as he is slapped out of his dream and replies groggily ‘Pardon Sir?’
There is a very good book in our library called Exercises in Style by Raymond Queneau. It contains the same story written in a wide range of styles. It even includes pig- and dog-latin!
For a writing activity this Friday I’ve pulled out some of the styles and whacked them into a slideshow. I’ve also written a short piece in the ‘notation’ style which is the first one in the book. The idea is to look through the features styles in the slideshow below – or ask to look through the book (which I am holding onto at the moment) write the ‘notation’ story below in one of the styles. Have fun!
The story (in ‘notation’ style, ie stipped to the bare essentials which means you need to flesh it out, provide details, etc.)
Exercises in style – Raymond Queneau – My example for the exercise:
In dining hall, during lunch. A student possibly in year 10 whose blazer is too tight but still done up, the white of his shirt visible between the buttons. He is eating a sandwich, possibly ham and cheese. Students walking around, chatting, eating their lunches. Someone runs past the aforementioned student and bumps him so that his lunch falls to the floor. The student wants to shout out but the running student is gone. He bends to pick up the sandwich but it’s too late; it is squashed under the feet of rushing boys. He swears under his breath. His is unhappy but not used to standing up to others. He sees a friend and goes over to him, hoping to get some sympathy.
Two hours later he is daydreaming in class. In his dream he defends himself against all the unjust bullying and accidents he’s experienced. The teacher calls his name twice. The second time he looks up and says, ‘Pardon, Miss?’