Prologue, Edward Jin 11J

This is part of a novel I’m trying to write(have been for some time, but kept getting sidetracked, haha) . Anyway, I’m posting the prologue for everyone to look at. Please take a look through it for me. It’s probably full of mistakes, haha.


An old man pushed opened a wooden gate and entered a small cottage. There was a young couple inside that was expecting him. Exchanging a light greeting, the old man continued to walk deeper into the building. He reached a bedroom. Faltering in front of the door, the old man took a deep breath and sighed. Having prepared himself, he opened the door.

There wasn’t much in the room, just a bed and a chair. A girl of tender age was lying in the bed, waiting for him.

“How are you feeling, little one?” The old man asked.

“I’m fine, grandpa,” came the reply.

The old man walked in and sat in the char beside the bed. Nothing was said for a while. The old man just sat there looking at the girl. The old man was thinking back on how the girl the girl had to spend her days I this bed.

This had all happened suddenly. The girl was fine one day, prancing around and playing around in the garden, but when she woke up the next day, her body had been paralysed. The most she could do was move her head, eyes and mouth. A week later she became blind and incapable of moving her head. Then, one by one, other parts of her body started breaking down. She was now at the stage where she could only hear and speak.

Noticing that the silence was turning awkward, the the old man finally opened his mouth. “Eve, tomorrow is your birthday. Is there anything you want?”

“No, there isn’t anything I particularly want.”

“Are you sure? Are you sure there isn’t anything you would like?”

The girl didn’t reply. The old man sensed the girl’s hesitation, and said,”you can ask for anything, anything at all.”

Eve forced a smile.”Thank you for asking, grandpa, but there isn’t anything I want.”

The old man nodded. “Well, if you decide you want something, make sure to tell me. Oh, but don’t tell me too late or this old dog won’t be able to fetch what you want in time, alright?

He did’t receive a reply. Sighing, he got up to leave. As the man was about to leave the room, Eve called out to him. “Please wait a minute, grandpa. To be honest, there are some things I want. Is it alright for you to listen to this selfish request of mine?”

The old man came back and sat down beside the girl again. “Of course. Tell me anything. I’ll listen to anything you say. So, what is it that you want?”

“… I want to go and see the garden one more time. I want to climb the highest of mountains. I want to dive into the deepest of oceans. I want to fly in the sky. I want to dance in meadows and lie there bathing in the warm sunlight when I’m to tired to move. I want to smell the fragrance of flowers. I want to watch the sun set in the horizon and gaze at the stars in the night sky. I want to be free. I…”

She stopped speaking.

“It’s fine, you don’t need to hold back. Tell me what you want.”

The girl couldn’t help but burst into tears.
“I… I… I,I want to live.”


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